- Chuck the Plant
It has come to our attention that many unfortunate souls have stumbled upon this story while searching for One Piece fan fiction (or One Piece hentai). All we can say is that we apologize for assaulting your eyes with this abomination.

As for those who came here searching for this specific story, all we can ask is "what the fuck is wrong with you"?

- Spoony Spoonicus
Posted on Halloween. It fits the date, mostly because reading this puts images into my head of the author as a soulless shell of a human wandering the deserted streets in search of functioning brain matter.

- Dio Brando
I was going to go with a comparison to Jason Voorhees, only instead of simply stabbing fanfics she proceeds to drag them to an abandoned factory, rape them repeatedly and then drown them in a vat of liquid....

...Goddamnit, this fanfic is dragging me down to its level. Let's just get this over with.

Disclaimer: I do not own One Piece.

- Alan Smithee
Yes, yes. You've said so before. AND WE THANK GOD REPEATEDLY FOR THIS FACT.

Chapter 3: The Devil Within


With a feral growl Luffy shrugged off his bonds and faced Blood a murderous gleam in his eye. “GET YOUR FUCKING HANDS OFF OF HER YOU BASTARD!”

- Megido
Didn't we read this exact sentence already? It sounds familiar.

Nami gasped as she saw a fierce aura surrounding Luffy, it was an evil aura one that chilled her to her very bones. ‘Is this the true power of the Devil’s Fruit?’


“As you wish.” Blood snarled as he flung Nami from his grasp so that she hit the mast that Luffy had recently been tied to with a thud her head snapping forward from the impact.

- The Guardian
Yes, now kick her a few times to piss him off even more!

Nami couldn’t believe what was happening. One minute Blood was brining her lips painfully close to his slit wrist and she could almost feel a part of her deep within the darkness of her heart craving a taste of that blood.

- Avatar
Erm, wasn't the whole point of the fight so that she wouldn't become a vampire?

And then something made the air seem heavy around her. She could barely breath, barely think,

- Megido
Everyone in this story seems to share that malady.

what was this all-powerful force that surrounded them? Through her haze of tears Nami’s eyes saw Luffy...but this couldn’t be her captain. No...this man, this being, before her wasn’t Luffy. He couldn’t be, after all, she was afraid of him.


The man before her was a monster. His eyes were tinted red, his hands were clawed, and his aura...such an evil, powerful aura surrounded him. This was not her captain. If Nami could see herself she would have seen herself shaking her head vigorously from side to side in denial.

- Alan Smithee
What? She can't shake her head in denial because she can't see herself doing it? What a crappy fanfic...
- Spoony Spoonicus
Why not just say "she shook her head in denial"? It's not as fancy but it gets the point across a lot better.

‘No!...that can’t be Luffy! That can’t be him. It just can’t be! Luffy...where is Luffy? And who...who is that...that monster?!

- Sturm
Again with the stuttering. NOBODY STUTTERS IN THEIR OWN THOUGHTS. STOP IT.

It can’t really be him can it? A man that I thought I could never fear - ever. But now...now as I look into his unfeeling eyes I feel fear. This just can’t be Luffy...what has become of you? What has driven you to this? Was it all...all for my sake? No! I was not the cause of this...I could not have made you come to this...to turn into something that you would be ashamed of....oh Luffy. I’m so sorry.’

- Spoony Spoonicus
The first of an oncoming tidal wave of endless fucking angst.

Even Blood seemed a little worried. After all this Luffy that now stood before him was nothing like the previous one - the carefree, happy, go lucky, unable to be fazed Captain of the Going Merry.

- Miles Edgeworth
Who spent the entire last two chapters being mopey and beating himself up.

No this was a completely different foe. One that should not be underestimated. Blood knew not to underestimate one’s opponent and so instead of facing the new Luffy decided to experiment with his men first.

- Mayor Mike Haggar
Not only a bad cliché, but a coward to boot.

“Now is the time to show these worms the strength of Captain Blood’s crew, men! Stand up against this mere insect that dares defy us

- Spoony Spoonicus
Blood is really SHODAN?
- SHODAN
E-e-eeeven I have MORe taste than thissssss, Hacker!


! Show him our true power, the power of darkness!”

“ARRRGGHHH!!!!” Captain Blood’s men cried in unison as they brandished their swords for battle. Nami watched in horror as their incisors began to lengthen, their faces become distorted, wings the color of midnight sprout from their back as they transformed into their vampyric forms. Saliva was dripping from their newly formed fangs, and their claws were twitching as they thirsted for blood.


But Luffy didn’t so much as flinch. Instead he looked pleased even. A chill went down Nami’s back as she saw Luffy lick his lips in a feral manner


- Megido
Yes, we get it. He's feral. Invest in a thesaurus. Hell, look one up online for free.

and charge the entire crew of Captain Blood head on. Nami shut her eyes as they collided not wanting to see and fearing the worst.


When she dared to open one eye she shrieked at what she saw. She had only closed her eyes for a few seconds but now...blood it was everywhere. And pieces...pieces of the vampyric crew now littered the deck. Arms...legs...heads...wings...that was all that was left of half of Blood’s phantasmagoric crew. If Blood and his men were the monsters...then what did that make Luffy now? Nami shivered.

- Dudley
No wonder's Blood's crew got torn to shreds, THEIR FINGERS DID NOT SHARPEN IN TO CLAWS! Yellow spiky hair is to Dragon Ball Z as sharpened fingers are to this fanfic.

Now because of shock or fear Nami wasn’t sure which she couldn’t close her eyes although for the life of her she would have given anything to be able to do so.

- Spoony Spoonicus
Ever hear of punctuation? I hear it's actually quite helpful for making your writing intelligible.

- Sturm
I think it's clear by now that she hasn't.

- Megido
Invest in a third-grade English textbook while you're at it.

Luffy...no this Monster attacked Blood’s crew without hesitation using his Devil’s Fruit powers in ways that Nami had never seen him use before. Luffy’s arms shot out towards some unsuspecting vampires as they tried to seek distance from Luffy in the air but it wasn’t far enough. Using his brute strength which must have tripled now in Luffy’s new ‘state’ he easily began to literally tear them apart. Even as they sunk their teeth into Luffy’s arm in retaliation it wasn’t enough to phase Luffy, not even for a second, he didn’t even flinch when one Vampire managed to stab Luffy through with a saber in his side, dark blood oozing out of the deep wound.


Nami couldn’t believe it. Luffy...her Luffy would have been shrieking at the pain in his side but no...this one ignored the pain...

- Dudley
HE ALWAYS IGNORES THE PAIN!

- Spoony Spoonicus
I refer you to his fight with Don Krieg, where he was impaled numerous times (some by his own doing) but didn't slow down in the slightest. Or how about his fight with Arlong, where his arm was nearly bitten the hell off and he barely flinched?

in fact it seemed as if this new Luffy used the pain as fuel to his fire of hate and anger. Luffy was getting more and more vicious as the attacks continued.

“Gomu Gomu no Snake Bind!!!” Luffy cried ensnaring two vampires in his serpentine arms and wrapping his arms around them continuously as they stretched.

- Spoony Spoonicus
Snake Bind? Have we wandered into Naruto or something?

- Sturm
I never thought I'd say it, but sitting through a Naruto marathon is infinitely preferential to suffering through this.

He then began to constrict his arms around their bodies until there their cries could be heard no more.


Covered in blood Luffy from head to toe, Luffy turned to face his remaining opponent, a feral grin on his face.

- Alan Smithee
Wow. Holy shit, that just really hurt to read. I got a "feral grin" on my face as I started thinking about burning this massive pile of putrid, festering liquid horse shit.


Captain Blood regarded the Captain of the Going Merry with a calm expression on his face. Instead of trembling in fear he met Luffy’s smile with one as equally disturbing as his own. He then began to applaud. “Bravo, that was quite a show. I have to say I underestimated your power...but one will always find immense strength in the path of darkness. It took your embrace of the dark side within you to find your true strength Luffy. This is the true power you see of the Devil’s Fruit. Just look at how powerful you have become! At least three times as much as your usual monstrous strength! And also now you have no hesitation, no qualms to end the life of another. You have become the perfect killing machine. And I respect that. Luffy...join me! Together we could rule East, West, South, and North Blue! We will be the great Pirate Kings and who of course will be our queen but the beautiful Nami.”

- Sturm
Every expository villain's speech ever written rolled into one, ladies and gentlemen.

- Spoony Spoonicus
Golf clap, "Bravo", you're stronger now, evil is good, join me even though I tried to kill you five minutes ago, rule the world. If cliché speeches were a Bingo card, Blood would be one maniacal chuckle away from a black-out.

But Luffy...was beyond coherent thought. And even if his dark side entertained the notion of allying with Blood as soon as he had mentioned her name...the name of his navigator all such thoughts were expelled from his mind.


‘She is my navigator and no one else’s! Mine! Mine! Mine!

- clobberpuppy
And another thing: Give me back my G.I. Joe figures!

She will be my queen!’

Luffy of course would never have said such a thing aloud under any normal circumstances but little did he know Nami had heard every single word.

Nami gasped as she heard those words leave his lips. Even in this state Luffy was still thinking about her, he was still just trying to protect her from Captain Blood. Nami bit her lower lip as the tears she tried to hold back came again. He was fighting so hard and all for her...all for her he had given up who he truly was...the real Luffy would never have done something so...atrocious...no if she ever managed to get the real Luffy back she would never tell him what had happened here today.


That’s right she had to stop this. Luffy, her captain, would have never wanted this. Luffy wasn’t that kind of person. It was all up to her now to save him before it was too late. She began to painfully drag herself in the direction of her captain cursing her inability to walk due to the fact she was still in her mermaid form.


Captain Blood took a step back as Luffy approached. Nami could almost see the expression written on his face as ‘uh oh.’

- clobberpuppy
Spaghetti-o's!

- Spoony Spoonicus
The dark content matter is hard to take seriously when the dialog reads like a bad episode of Rugrats.

And then Luffy attacked. Nami watched with baited breath waiting to see Blood’s counter, expecting to see Luffy flying backwards...but this time was different.


Luffy swung several hard punches at Blood all at once with lightning fast speed, her eyes couldn’t even keep up. “Gomu Gomu no Gatling Gun!” Luffy roared.

Blood was visibly surprised when he had just moved out of the way of one blow to be on the receiving end of another. One blow hit Blood square in the jaw and sent him flying backwards into the main mast with a sickening crack. If it wasn’t for Blood’s regenerative powers he would have been a goner.

- Dudley
But he had regenerative powers, so it did not kill him. Actually it might have, and then he just regenerated his neck, which brought him back to life, because he's a vampire and he has regenerative powers.

Then just as Blood was getting his bearings Luffy was upon him. Like a pouncing beast Luffy leapt at Blood pinning him to the mast clawing at his chest with his own claws leaving red welts there.


He then grabbed Blood’s left arm and using his immense strength ripped Blood’s arm off before Blood could do anything to resist.


Blood shrieked as his arm was severed from him and huddled over from the pain. But Luffy wasn’t through with him yet. He quickly grabbed onto his other arm and began to pull slowly this time....


Nami could see now that Luffy in fact had the upper hand. Blood was being subdued and it was still coming as a shock to her that the tables had now turned.


Blood howled in pain as Luffy began to torture him...

Torture...Luffy was actually torturing someone.

- Sturm
The reader.

- Alan Smithee
Whatever. You, dear author, are doing far worse. You've butchered the characters of One Piece; you're now torturing fans of One Piece by making them read this terrible shitfic.

Nami knew she had to stop this but found herself hesitating. How could she expect to confront Luffy in the current beast-like state that he was in. She couldn’t believe it when she realized what was holding her back - fear. Perhaps Luffy wouldn’t recognize her and rip her in two if she decided to approach...Nami knew she was running out of time. She couldn’t allow Luffy to get pulled any further down this path of darkness he was currently headed on. Pulling herself against the rough deck was hard in her mer-girl form. If only she could run to him. If only she had more time. Her tail was embedded with splinters...but this was nothing compared to Luffy’s pain, so she kept going.


One of Luffy’s powerful clawed hands wrapped itself around Captain Blood’s neck and he lifted him easily off the ground and smashed him into the mast behind him. Luffy narrowed his eyes at Blood and licked his lips. Nami knew what he was about to do.....


Bile spewed from Blood’s mouth as he tried to speak. “Luffy my boy, well done. Although you may think that you have won it is I who have won this day. Finish it now Luffy! Kill me! Rip of my head and stomp on it and laugh! Kill me and your ascension to darkness will be complete! You will be a new you! A more powerful you! Now kill me!”

- Sturm
Captain Blood is really Emperor Palpatine, apparently.

- Spoony Spoonicus
So capturing his crew, torturing them for weeks, enslaving Nami, and then throwing them all to the sharks was just a ruse to make Luffy evil?


“NOOO!” Nami had finally made it to her captain and flung her arms around his legs from where she lay below him on the wet deck. “No Luffy...please don’t do this...I don’t want to lose you. Come back to me Luffy...I don’t want to see any more blood...more death. I can’t take it anymore. Seeing you like this is breaking my heart.” Nami buried her face into Luffy’s legs and sobbed.


Luffy’s head snapped around to glare down at Nami...Nami’s who’s face was flushed, and who’s eyes were filled with tears...tears that were caused by him.


‘She’s crying...she’s crying because of me.’ A small voice whispered in the back of Luffy’s mind.


“I promised...I promised I wouldn’t steal her smile!” Luffy suddenly exclaimed and grasped his head as if he was in pain. It was like there were two voices in his head, each struggling for the upper hand.

- Commander Ladd
"WHOOPS, I just spoiled the big plot twist, so now the rest of this story is just a lengthy, boring and occasionally nauseating waste of time! Ha ha ha!"

- Avatar
Since we all know how it ends, can we go home now?

- Megido
We're bound by contract to endure it to the end, under penalty of walking the plank.

- Avatar
Damn!

“No...get out! You made her cry! I...I made Nami cry! Aghhhhh!”

- clobberpuppy
Yaaaaaaaawn.

- Spoony Spoonicus
Anyone else get the impression that the author plays too much Xenogears?

Suddenly Luffy collapsed to the ground unconscious.

“Luffy!” Nami cried as she quickly began to drag herself towards Luffy’s unconscious form. “Oh Luffy...” She sat up and put Luffy’s head on her lap, resting it on her fishtail, and stroked his hair. She had almost forgotten where they were..what they had been doing only moments before.

- Miles Edgeworth
Pity that this will become a trend and will lead into some of the most disgusting scenes ever written.

All she knew was that she had managed to stop him. That she had managed to reach him with her voice.


Luckily, Zoro, Sanji, and Ussop were wide awake and quite aware of their current situation. Just as Blood would have been upon the two of them Zoro’s sword was at Blood’s throat.


It had been slow going but Zoro had finally managed to cut through his bonds with a shard of glass he had pilfered.

- Spoony Spoonicus
And so we evade a continuity error in the laziest way possible.

“Don’t even think about it.” Zoro said at Blood as he tapped his sword against Blood’s neck. “It seems the only way to kill you monsters is a classic beheading. Well then so be it!”


“Wait Zoro!” Nami cried. “Enough killing...please...I just can’t....not now...”


“But Nami this bastard deserves to die! After everything he’s done to us...and especially to you. And don’t forget to our captain...don’t you want revenge on him for corrupting Luffy’s pure heart?”

- Dudley
This is coming from a guy who seriously considered cutting off his own feet just to escape a trap and get a few good swings at a guy. He'd lop the guys head off before anyone else noticed.

- Spoony Spoonicus
He didn't just consider it; he'd gotten halfway through his legs before Luffy and Usopp showed up to break him out.

Nami faltered but then shook her head. “This isn’t what the real Luffy would have wanted. He would want Blood to live and see the error of his ways and perhaps become a better person later on.” She managed a small smile thinking of her Captain’s easygoing way of thinking.

- Spoony Spoonicus
Actually, he considers killing to be letting them off easy. Leaving them alive to see their dreams shattered is a far worse punishment in his book.

- Avatar
How do you know all this?

- Spoony Spoonicus
I actually bothered to read the source material, unlike dear author.

Zoro sighed and sheathed his sword. “Damn it woman, you’re right you know that. He would most certainly want something like that.”


“Nami-swaannn! You are as wise as you are beautiful.” Sanji beamed as he came up to Nami and Luffy.


Captain Blood took this moment of distraction to take flight into the dark clouds that swirled over head making the perfect cover to escape unnoticed.


Zoro’s eye twitched as he wondered when the cook had managed to get free.

- Sturm
Moreover, how did he get free?

- Spoony Spoonicus
So much for evading that continuity error.


“Uh...” Nami found herself at a lose for words.


“And even more beautiful I must say as a mermaid...that beautiful pink tail totally suits you...” Sanji’s eyes were know two large hearts.

- Dr. Vinic
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- DR. VINICS ROBOT VIKING
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- Dr. Vinic
FFFfffuuuuuck.


“But then...it’s not permanent right?”


“Huh?” Nami asked confusedly. Just what could that cook be getting at anyways?


“Well...the tail you know...because the lose of your long slender legs...and your-.”


BONK.


“Thanks Zoro.” Nami sighed. “But it’s not permanent it’s only when I get wet that I have a mermaid tail. Thank god.”


“Allow me to dry you off...” Sanji moaned from his prone state on the deck.


“He’ll never learn,” Zoro sighed but as he looked at Nami he found he had a new found respect for the wench.

- Spoony Spoonicus
When did Zoro become such a misogynist?

She had fought bravely this night, tonight she was a true warrior. He never would have thought that Nami had it in her. Maybe just maybe he saw something of what Sanji might see in her. Zoro shook his head these weren’t the kinds of thoughts he should be having about a fellow crewmate. He would punish himself tomorrow with 2000 pushups he decided.


“Uh Zoro do I have something on my face?” Nami asked a slight flush on her cheeks. He was looking at her so intensely. She didn’t know what to think or feel. “I would have thought it would be my tail you’d all stare at for sure...”


“Huh? Oh sorry.” Zoro turned away.


“It is REAL!” Ussop was saying as he was lifting Nami’s tail up to inspect it.


A vein began to pulse on Nami’s temple.


“And I thought maybe it was all a lie.”


SLAP.


- Commander Ladd
Single word descriptors? The narrative just keeps getting lazier.

- clobberpuppy
She could have easily made it halfway funny by utilizing a handstand tail swing!

“And how the hell could I fake having a tail Ussop I mean geese!”

- Alan Smithee
GEESE!

Nami giggled. And then they all broke out into some much needed laughter, they say laughter heals the wounded soul.

- Avatar
I could use some soul healing after reading this travesty.

- clobberpuppy
To seanbaby.com!

As Nami looked down at the unconscious Luffy in her arms she wished he could be laughing right along with them but after all he had been through for her sake she didn’t feel right waking him just yet. There was always tomorrow, and who knew what the day would bring.


To be continued....


AN: Let me know what you thought of that chappy peeps!!!!! Review Review Review! Please! :)

- Spoony Spoonicus
"Chappy" is the worst shortening of a word I've ever witnessed.

As for the chapter, it embodies everything I hate about modern storytelling. Angst, darkness and gore do not automatically make a good plot, no matter how thickly you lay them on. The story completely ignores the characters and established logic of the series it's based on, and even its own logic doesn't apply half the time. The villain is generic and one-dimensional. But most of all, it just seems like it's trying to hammer a collection of half-baked "cool" ideas into a working story, which, believe me, never works.


- Alan Smithee

Here's what I thought: Ditch the "To be continued...", and dump this thing into the nearest outhouse. Then it'll be a barely decent fanfic. And here's my Review Review Review: BULLSHIT. Negative infinity out of 5 stars.